Tuesday, September 18, 2012
IB2 Logan Green
Everyone here, at ASU, has chosen to pursue some form of higher education. We all are participating in class, when we dont sleep in. We are all striving for a diploma of some sort, to gratify our time spent both in and out of class. While everyone here has that goal to graduate we all have different interpretations of that goal. I personally strive to fly. That may not seem like the same goal at all but let me explain. My current goal, is in pursuing a bachelor's degree in aerospace engineering. My goal is also to soar academically and succeed in all of my classes. My goal is to stand apart from the sea of the student body. These heights may not seem attainable to some people, but they haven't flown before like I have.
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I really like how your intro seems short and to the point and really catches me as more of an intro than mine because of how huge it is just looking at mine could intimidate someone which is why i like yours for its simplicity. What I dont see in your intro and you may have done it intentionally but I dont see what the actual event that created this strive to fly and to soar above the rest. You may have been wanting to leave it out to keep the reader interested in reading to find out and that is how i feel but think about if that is what you really want or not.
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DeleteI like how your intro is very catchy, and makes me want to read much more. I also, was unsure of the actual event that makes you want to stand out from the crowd and be unique. But also as joseph said that does leave me wondering what it is so it can make one want to read much more.
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